I have come to believe… that the ocean is something not to be messed with.

I am standing here today as a…Thalassophobiac.

Since I was young… I have been petrified of the ocean.

1. I have never written a rhetorical analysis before. I confused rhetorical analysis with an argumentative paper at the beginning of this assignment. It took me a little long to catch on to what was necessary and what was not in the essay. I did not know that we would have to explain each part of ethos, pathos, logos in the essay, but I should’ve assumed that was the analysis portion of the essay.
2. I wouldn’t have known that there is such a drastic decline in the amount of students who are not participating in higher level mathematics. The author convinced me this a serious issue going into the future.
3. I believe I got a better understanding of what the essay is from the sample that was presented at the beginning. I am more of a visual learner so I prefer to have something that I can base myself off of. I want to ask more questions for the next two essays so I can better visualize how I will write.
4. When are rhetorical analysis essays used in the real world. I have never seen a paper that deliberately points out the ethos, pathos, and logos of another paper.

Grammar guide

Sentences/complete sentence/independent clause

IC: Subject verb “complete thought”

Sentence Errors:

1.Fragments

For dependent clauses

Subordinate Conjunctions: after, although, as, as if, as though, because, before, except, if, since, though, unless, until, when, whereas

2. Run-on: Fused Sentence and Comma Splice

-Dividing them into two complete sentences. Add a period to the end of the first sentence,

and capitalize the first letter in the second sentence.

-By using an appropriate coordinating conjunction and a comma. Coordinating

conjunctions are: for, and, nor, but, or, yet, and so (FANBOYS).

-Using a semicolon. Semicolons may be used to join independent clauses not joined by

coordinating conjunctions.

Capitalization

1. The first word of a direct quotation. (“We are going home,” said Dad.)

Commas

1. Use commas to set off parenthetical expressions that provide additional information that can be easily removed without changing the meaning of the sentence. (Reserved seats are an extra cost, according to the brochure.  The actors, I believe, are not ready for the show.)
2. Use a comma to set off two or more introductory prepositional phrases (prepositions-often give us more information about time, place, and movement: in, before, after, at, down, across, inside, out, outside, for, by, on, between, behind, under, around, against, near, through, throughout), when the prepositional phrase is very long (four words or more), or when a comma is needed to make the meaning clear. (In the late fall of 1991, Mr. Jordan was elected mayor. After her incredibly complicated and exhaustingly emotional day, the grieving woman cried herself to sleep.  On Friday, Freddy, Frank, and Frodo went to the movies. )
3. Use a comma or set of commas to set off too in a sentence when too means also. (Air pollution, too, causes problems.)

Commas in sentence structure

Use a comma when writing a complex sentence in which the subordinate clause precedes the independent clause. Subordinate clauses will begin with subordinate conjunctions such as: after, although, as, as soon as, because, before, even though, except, if, since, so that, than, that,  though, unless, when, where, while, or until.  (As soon as it stops raining, we will leave for the beach. We will leave for the beach as soon as it stops raining. )

Semicolons

1. Use semicolons when writing compound sentences using a conjunctive adverb or transitional words or phrases. Some of the conjunctive adverbs are accordingly, also, besides, consequently, finally, furthermore, hence, however, instead, moreover, nevertheless, otherwise, similarly, still, therefore, thus.   Common transitional words include as a result, for example, in addition, in fact, in other words, on the other hand. (I have not had much time to devote to my studies; nevertheless, I take a major test on Tuesday. I have been spending all of my free time watching videos; as a result, I have not read my novel.)
2. Use semicolons instead of commas between items in a series if the items themselves contain commas. (Next week the President will visit Norfolk, Virginia; Cincinnati, Ohio, and San Antonio, Texas.)

Quotations

1. Use a period at the end of explanatory words that come at the end of a sentence. (“What were you thinking?” asked my mother.)

2. Use a comma to separate a direct quotation from the explanatory words. (Stephan explained, “I think we’ll be late for class due to the traffic.”) If the introduction to the quote is an independent clause, use a colon. (She offered the following advice: “Don’t drink the water.”) Do not use a comma if the quote is made a part of the sentence itself. (She said that “it was fine.”)

3. Commas and periods always go inside the quotation marks, and colons and semicolons go outside. (“There was a storm last night,” Paul said. “There was a storm last night”; he said this with fear in his voice.)

Words

COMPLEMENT-noun, something that completes; verb, to complete
ex: Orange juice complements eggs and French toast any day

 COMPLIMENT-noun, praise; verb, to praise
ex: I complimented the girl on her dress, and she blushed

CONSCIENCE-sense of right and wrong
ex: My conscience is telling me not to steal the baby’s food

CONSCIOUS-awake
ex: I am not fully conscious until about midday

EMINENT-famous, respected
ex: up in coming eminent artist Chance the Rapper received 3 Grammys
IMMANENT-inherent or intrinsic

ex: Her beauty was immanent because she was born with a beautiful matter.

  IMMINENT-ready to take place
ex: Tension was imminent as soon as my aunt walked in.

Jabara’s message is that in the end he knows kids will get more than just money out of this. They will gain the ability to learn math in a productive manner. The students realize what was once a hard subject for them is now understandable. This sets up students to have a skill in the future that is in urgent need. Jebara made his app in a way that the students know what it is like to earn money and so they can find the value in it. Eventually students will not need to use this application to improve their math skills, because they will learn to find a new respect for the subject. As Jebara delivered his wisdom he did not force it upon the people watching. He wanted the audience to feel comfortable around him, this helped immensely because everyone was engaged in what he had to say. The graphs and data he had showed that he knew that this was an issue of importance. Jebara’s TED Talk is not for the money or advertisement, but rather general concern for the future of mathematics.

Alan Rodriguez
Janel Spencer
WRT 101S
19 September 2019
Pay Them Kids
The best way for students to start doing homework is to start paying them! The founder and CEO of Mathspace Mohamad Jebara in his TED talk, “This company pays kids to do their math homework,” is suggesting that the best way to get students to do homework is through a money incentive. Jebara supports this claim by narrating his once personal struggle with math and how he found a new appreciation for it, and he then provides statistics of how many high school students struggle and don’t follow through. His purpose is to improve student engagement with mathematics in order to change the decline of students who aren’t understanding the subject. He establishes a friendly, informal relationship with his audience at his TED talk and for anyone who watches it. Jebara’s persuades his viewers that math is a need-to-know subject by evoking worry for the future generation, his use of statistics, and him telling his humorous, personal story.
One of the messages Mohammed Jebara is trying to portray is that many students are falling behind in math and they are lost after. Once students get to this point, they don’t have the motivation to carry on (Jebara). He tells us, “We need students to stick around long enough through the difficult parts to appreciate the beauty when it all ties together.” (2:53) Jebara is telling his audience that math is an important subject that people need to understand more than ever. As time progresses into the modern age, students need to keep up with the latest technologies in order to advance in the future (Jebara). Jebara states a quote by the mathematician Francis Su, “We study mathematics for play, for beauty, for truth, for justice and for love.” He believes mathematics should be studied for the want to learn more. Jebara gains credibility by quoting other mathematicians and saying that he developed an app that helps with his issue. Recently, students have been saying the opposite of Francis Su (Jebara). When Jebara realized the drastic amount of people who are finding less interest in mathematics, he decided to do something about it.
Jebara shows the audience a graph of the alarming decline of kids in advanced math and the growing advancements the world has in math. The immense separation between these two statistics was a big surprise to the people watching. He continued talking about the how mathematicians are needed a lot more than ever, but, “supply is in steady decline.” He also states, “In this digital age where fake news can influence election results, this is very concerning.” This fact is very alarming because the more we move into the future the harder it will to be know what’s real and what’s fake. As Jebara continues presenting, he feels that his statements have not made much of an impact. So Jebara gives an example by changing the view of his graph. He says, “It’s the exact same data but I’ve manipulated the representation to influence you. And that’s cool, that’s my job up here.” Jebara changed the view on his graph for the audience to realize the effect that this will have in the future. This is a strong use of logos, because it is visual evidence of the number of students who are driving away from math. This gives the audience perceivable information that shows the gravity of the situation and why action needs to be taken. In the last comment Jebara made he shows his comical side too; this is helps him connect with the audience so that they know he is a good person.
The relationship Jebara makes with the audience is friendly and easy going as he performs to them. He uses a humorous story of his one-time struggle with math; this story is to try to relate with the audience. He speaks about the problem he faced when dealing with complex and imaginary numbers. “Imaginary numbers? Seriously? But mathematics is a source of truth, please don’t go abstract on me. I would have studied art if I wanted to play with imaginary numbers.” (1:15) said Jebara. This causes the audience to laugh; establishing the use of pathos which is a prime reason as to why he is listened to. Jebara knows that he must catch their attention, or he will sound too boring. He then ties the story in together by later finding the beauty in complex and imaginary numbers. He explains to the audience that complex and imaginary numbers are important in many careers today. Throughout the presentation he invokes laughter out of the audience to be more appealing. When Jebara got the idea to make MathSpace he had questions he waned to get answered. Jebara fell upon a study that said money improves test scores. He wanted to put this in his creation but wondered if giving money to students was morally correct. “I immediately got excited about the possibilities of implementing this in our program…there were a few concerns that crept in our mind. Firstly, was this ethical?” (7:49) said Jebara. He once again receives laughter from his audience. Even when explaining the building of his application; Jebara still manages to crack a few jokes. In the presentation he makes sure that no one is offended by the humorus remarks that he is making. The crowd knows that behind these remarks is some truth. Out of all the rhetorical strategies used by Jebara I believe his use of pathos is strongest. , Jebara still manages to “ I immediately got
Jabara’s message is that in the end he knows kids will get more than just money out of this. They will gain the ability to learn math in a productive manner. The students realize what was once a hard subject for them is now understandable. This sets up students to have a skill in the future that is in urgent need. Jebara made his app in a way that the students know what it is like to earn money and so they can find the value in it. Eventually students will not need to use this application to improve their math skills, because they will learn to find a new respect for the subject. As Jebara delivered his wisdom he did not force it upon the people watching. He wanted the audience to feel comfortable around him, this helped immensely because everyone was engaged in what he had to say. The graphs and data he had showed that he knew that this was an issue of importance. Jebara’s TED Talk is not for the money or advertisement, but rather general concern for the future of mathematics.

Work Cited
Jebara, Mohamad. “This company pays kids to do their math homework.” TED@Westpac, December 2017, http://www.ted.com/talks/mohamad_jebara_this_company_pays_kids_to_do_their_math_homework.

Pay Them Kids

The best way for students to start doing homework is to start paying them! The founder and CEO of Mathspace Mohamad Jebara in his TED talk, “This company pays kids to do their math homework,” is suggesting that the best way to get students to do homework is through a money incentive. Jebara supports this claim by narrating his once personal struggle with math and how he found a new appreciation for it, and he then provides statistics of how many high school students struggle and don’t follow through. His purpose is to improve student engagement with mathematics in order to change the decline of students who aren’t understanding the subject. He establishes a friendly, informal relationship with his audience at his TED talk and for anyone who watches it. Jebara’s persuades his viewers that math is a need to know subject through the use of worry for the future generation, statistics, and a humorous personal story.

One of the messages Mohammed Jebara is trying to portray is that many students are falling behind in math and they are lost after. Once students get to this point, they don’t have the motivation to carry on. He tells us, “We need students to stick around long enough through the difficult parts to appreciate the beauty when it all ties together.” (2:53) Jebara is telling his audience that math is an important subject that people need to understand more than ever. As time progresses into the modern age, students need to keep up with the latest technologies in order to advance in the future. Jebara states a quote by the mathematician Francis Su, “We study mathematics for play, for beauty, for truth, for justice and for love.” He believes mathematics should be studied for the want to learn more. Recently, students have been saying the opposite of Francis Su(Jebara). When Jebara realized the drastic amount of people who are finding less interest in mathematics, he decided to do something about it.

Jebara shows the audience a graph of the alarming decline of kids in advanced math and the growing advancements the world has in math. The immense separation between these two statistics was a big surprise to the people watching.  He continued talking about the how mathematicians are needed a lot more than ever, but, “supply is in steady decline.” He also states, “In this digital age where fake news can influence election results, this is very concerning.” This fact is very alarming because the more we move into the future the harder it will to be know what’s real and what’s fake. As Jebara continues presenting he feels that his statements have not made much of an impact. So Jebara gives an example by changing the view of his graph. He says “It’s the exact same data but I’ve manipulated the representation to influence you. And that’s cool, that’s my job up here.” Jebara uses the fact that he made before and used it against the audience which made them all very impressed.

Work Cited

Mohamad Jebara-https://www.ted.com/talks/mohamad_jebara_this_company_pays_kids_to_do_their_math_homework/up-next?language=en This Company Pays Kids To Do Their Math Homework

Thesis: Jebara tells his viewers that math is a need to know subject through the use of questioning the importance, factual data & statistics, and humorous personal story

Topic sentence 1: Mohammed questions the importance of this issue and why action needs to be taken.

Topic sentence 2: One thing that Jebara further explains is the statistics that helped prove his point.

Topic Sentence 3: Jebara relates to the audience by telling a humorous personal story.

1. In the article that I am analyzing the narrators intended audience is teachers, students and parents. The student audience is primarily to help them from struggling in math and to give them an incentive to do math. The parent audience is to convince them to invest more into their children so that they can improve in math. Teacher audience is to explain that kids will do better if they have a reason to do their work.
2. The parent audience is mainly affected by this since they are the ones who would be paying for their child’s education. We assume the parent does not want to lose money so they will invest more time into how their child is learning. This does not seem ethical to the parents but the data shows that this is a better approach to helping the students learn.
3. The audience will be able to benefit form this because this topic benefits their finances, education, and future in mathematics. We need the student to know that the future ids in their hands. This is necessary information since it can influence the world around us. With how fast math is moving in the world we need to keep up.
4. This is an interesting topic because it involves making and saving money. This is especially good for students that are not very good at math and want to improve, because it’s a double win for them. This also helps teachers because their students are learning at a good rate. This topic is underrated because it is about paying kids to do their homework, it sounds laughable. If more people knew how much this will make a difference then it would b a bigger topic of conversation.
5. The audience might ask, how does the paying work? and does the method work? All thequestions can be answered in the video but my article can answer the questions like if this will work in all areas of the world? Or if this is going to lead to better futures?
6. I believe my audience is educated and can understand that this is a pressing issue and will be able to act onit if they read my pape. this affects the person reading so they will need to have some emotion to it.

Pay Them Kids

The best way for students to start doing homework is to start paying them! The founder and CEO of Mathspace Mohamad Jebara in his TED talk “This company pays kids to do their math homework”, is suggesting that the best way to get students to do homework is through a money incentive. Jebara supports this claim by narrating his once personal struggle with math and how he found a new appreciation for it, he then provides statistics of how many high school students struggle and don’t follow through. His purpose is to improve student engagement with mathematics in order to change the decline of students who aren’t understanding the subject. He establishes a friendly, informal relationship with his audience at his TED talk and for anyone who watches it. Jebara’s tells his viewers that math is a need to know subject through the use of worry for the future generation, statistics, and a humorous personal story.

One of the messages Mohammed Jebara is trying to portray is that many students are falling behind in math and they are lost after. Once students get to this point, they don’t have the motivation to carry on. He tells us, “we need students to stick around long enough through the difficult parts to appreciate the beauty when it all ties together.” (2:53) Jebara is telling his audience that math is an important subject that people need to understand more than ever. As time progress into the modern age, students need to keep up with the latest technologies in order to advance in the future. Jebara states a quote by the mathematician Francis Su, “We study mathematics for play, for beauty, for truth, for justice and for love.” He believes mathematics should be studied for the want to learn more. Recently students have been saying the opposite of Francis Su. When Jebara realized the drastic amount of people who are finding less interest in mathematics, he decided to do something about it.

Work Cited

Mohamad Jebara-https://www.ted.com/talks/mohamad_jebara_this_company_pays_kids_to_do_their_math_homework/up-next?language=en This Company Pays Kids To Do Their Math Homework

Introduction: The speaker mohamed Jebara uses all of the elements of persuasion to convince his audience. He uses example throughout the talk to help the audience visualize the problem.

Main point 1: Uses pathos with worry for the future generation and how they can handle math in the future.

Main point 2: Uses logos with statistics, to appeal to the audience.

Main point 3: Uses pathos once again by telling a humorous personal story to try and relate to the audience.

Conclusion: Explain why all of these factors were good at convincing the audience and tie that back into my thesis